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Sunday, May 21, 2006

What's Everyone Working On?

I'm eager to hear all about everyone's work-in-progress. There's an extreme amount of talent here amongst the Five Star authors. I've spent a lot of time visiting sites, reading excerpts, and the journey and discoveries were sheer delight. Made me run over to Amazon.com and place my order:)

Now that my final edits have been turned in on TROPICAL WARNINGS, I'm hard at work on revising and revamping my second title in the Wanderlust Mystery series. Tentatively titled, THE LAST RESORT. For me, the most difficult writing came with the prologue (which I'm considering dropping as a prologue and changing to "Chapter One). With it I discovered the true experience of research in getting facts correct with ocean navigation. Along the way I received such comments as. "Why waste time with so much factual research? The book is fiction. Who cares?" I CARE! Fiction or not, I certainly don't want some reader down the road saying, "you better check your facts, ma'am!"

So here it is--you be the judge! A sneak peek into my WIP. Oh, and speaking of "peaks" here's the link to my very first press release! http://www.rvnewsdaily.com/article.php/april_star

The cloaking fog appeared strangely protective. There were areas along Anastasia Island’s coastline where no one could hear you scream. And it was in such an area that the bottle was launched, spinning through the air and landing with a splash. It bobbed and weaved quietly eight feet above the sandy bottom before deciding on a direction. Seemingly, it appeared to be floating a quarter mile off the northerly point of St. Augustine Harbor.

As the day progressed, feeling the pull of the tide, the bottle moved imperceptibly westward before making a gradual circuit around the jetty outward along Salt Run inlet. Starting its journey into the path of the sunlight. Glinting through the sparkling Atlantic, the bottle reflected blue, gold and pink.

Three days later it had cleared the inlet area and was moving north by northwest, about two hundred feet offshore, in fifteen feet of water along the Ancient Sand Dunes.

The rolling waves of the Atlantic and gentle westerly breeze blew across the tropics. Despite the westerly wind, the bottle continued to float west. St. Augustine, Florida has over four and a half miles of beach that stretch along the northeastern tip of Anastasia Island. It is situated right in the middle of modern Florida -- a mere 40 miles from the glassy skyscrapers of downtown Jacksonville, 100 miles from the rocket ships of Kennedy Space Center and 100 miles from the fantasy theme parks of Orlando -- but its nearly four and a half centuries of history make it seem worlds away. The bottle had floated aimlessly for over 200 miles and seven days before drifting into an offshore basin where the water circulated in a counterclockwise motion. The bottle was in the extreme south of this basin. The circulation moved the bottle westward, back toward home.

For two days, the bottle washed back and forth against the rock and wooden structure of the south end of the jetty; as if it were uncertain whether to go inside, toward St. Augustine, or outside, back into the Atlantic.

The romantic symbolism of bottles containing proclamations of love and being tossed out to sea have intrigued people for as long as there have been bottles. Oceanographers have charted these romantic journeys; Hollywood has made blockbuster movies out of the tenderness from the notion.

The bottle that had been hurled out in the Atlantic on a balmy spring day from St. Augustine Harbor contained no messages of undying love and passion. Nor did it contain charts or maps of shipwrecks. What it did contain was secrets, lies, betrayals and the most unspeakable of crimes—murder. And just as the journey of the bottle itself, it would alter the course and direction of many lives beginning with the life of whoever discovered this message in a bottle.

8 Comments:

  • At May 21, 2006 12:27 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said…

    Well, I'm hooked and want to read more. Personally I love prologues.

     
  • At May 22, 2006 10:32 AM, Anonymous Anonymous said…

    Hi April:

    That's some nice imagery and well written except for a couple of things that jumped out at me. Being an editor by trade, I noticed this paragraph has some problems:

    "As the day progressed, feeling the pull of the tide, the bottle moved imperceptibly westward before making a gradual circuit around the jetty outward along Salt Run inlet. Starting its journey into the path of the sunlight. Glinting through the sparkling Atlantic, the bottle reflected blue, gold and pink."

    Uhm, does a bottle really feel things, or is it merely a victim of the flow? And then the line, "Starting..." is not a complete sentence.

    Otherwise, great work!

    Jon Baxley
    THE BLACKGLOOM BOUNTY

    ps: I agree completely about details and historical references. They DO matter, even in fantasy writing.

     
  • At May 22, 2006 11:19 AM, Blogger April Star said…

    Jon,

    Thank you so much for your comments! You're absolutely right...the bottle didn't
    feel" the affects of its pull...I'll delete "feeling the pull of the tide." The sentence fragment has also been revised to be clearer: As it started its journey into the path of the sunlight, glinting through the sparkling Atlantic, the bottle reflected blue, gold and pink."

    Thank you!

     
  • At May 22, 2006 11:22 AM, Blogger April Star said…

    Book lover...Thank you! I've heard both pro and con statements on prologues. I also enjoy those I've studied in many novels.

    April

     
  • At May 22, 2006 11:45 AM, Blogger I. Michael Koontz said…

    Regarding the anthropomorphic bottle 'feeling' the tide: perhaps it's not so incorrect if the author wants to make the bottle into an almost-alive character, as if it had a mind of its own. Of course, one would have to set that up with multiple such references to make that clear to the reader, but sometimes I think that's very effective in literature.

    i.e. "The bottle moved swiftly and with the tide, effortlessly resisting the eddys and currents that attempted to alter its course. Then, without warning, it struck a submerged log, throwing it out of the water and into another flow that led to a small rill fed by the river. As if being called home after a long absence, it ventured without hesitation into the clear water of the stream, spinning wildly in apparent delight at this unexpected change of destination."

    Okay, maybe that's not the best example I could come up with, but sometimes I like giving inanimate objects a life or soul, especially if they are an integral part of the story. One just has to do it enough, I think, to let the audience know it is intentional, and not an error.

     
  • At May 22, 2006 11:48 AM, Blogger I. Michael Koontz said…

    Whoops--before anyone tells me it is incorrect, delete the word "and" after the word "swiftly" in my example in my previous post.

    There--that's better!

     
  • At May 22, 2006 3:17 PM, Blogger April Star said…

    GREAT point, I. Michael Koontz! The bottle is very much an integral part of the story, or at least the contents are (human cremains) so yes, it could have a "feeling soul." This is what I was TRYING to put forth to the reader--not so much that the bottle had been feeling and experiencing this journey..but the contents. The bottle washes ashore in Chapter One at the feet of my hero and heroine, and then the secrets begin to unfold.

    I appreciate the feedback. Thanks so much!

     
  • At May 22, 2006 7:23 PM, Blogger Karen Fenech said…

    Hi April,

    Great start!

    Regards,
    Karen

    Karen Fenech
    www.karenfenech.com
    UNHOLY ANGELS - Available Now
    BETRAYAL - coming November 2006

     

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